Dear Amy – Update

Posted on 19/02/2013 by Daniel Postlethwaite

So there hasn’t be an update on either my monologue or film script recently hence the “Open Questions” that seem to have been a little hit and miss but the response to the previous ones have been good just no comments on the latest one yet really. Don’t know what went wrong there.

But onto the topic at hand. Dear Amy. My monologue.

I managed to get some more feedback on it today after “performing” it in class (read performing as – reading out nervously). The feedback was as follows: Continue reading →

Dawn Draft Notes – Full

Posted on 28/01/2013 by Daniel Postlethwaite

Based on feedback from the first draft of DAWN it seems I have my work cut out for me, but I love a challenge and I have till May so I’m not in a situation yet and I will be working on it this coming week. I will post up the first 10 pages tomorrow of the new opening as I have to take them in to uni tomorrow so I may as well rewrite the beginning before I read it in class.

Here are the complete list of changes that you can see coming to the second draft: Continue reading →

Dear Amy, – Five Minute Monologue – Draft 2!

Posted on 26/01/2013 by Daniel Postlethwaite

I have just completed draft 2 of my five minute monologue “Dear Amy,”

Not much has changed to be honest, because it was so short and the feedback was so positive from the first draft I couldn’t seen much reason too change it. There didn’t seem to be many spelling or grammar mistakes that stood out, though I could be wrong, either so it went quite well.

I have just changed some of the phrasing in it and added a few more lines so if you want to read the second draft feel free or if you didn’t read the first now is your chance to read the slightly new and improved version!

Enjoy: Continue reading →

Dear Amy, (Draft 1)

Posted on 22/01/2013 by Daniel Postlethwaite

Dear Amy, (stylised with the comma) is a 5 minute monologue I have been tasked to write for my screenwriting module this semester (along with my script report). I got the brief this morning and have just finished what is the very first rough draft.

I hope you all like it and the little mini-twist at the end. Please feel free to leave any feedback you have for me in the comments! Continue reading →

First Draft of DAWN Complete!

Posted on 19/01/2013 by Daniel Postlethwaite

It’s done! The first draft of my feature film with the new working title Dawn: An Awakening.

It comes in at just over 57 pages. The minimum amount is 90 so I have 33 pages to work with whilst adding some back story and subplots which I have spoken about in previous posts. As I went along and finished up this first draft I kept a log of changes I want to make, just little things I won’t to go back and add etc to help with continuity and maybe add a bit more drama.

Both the script and the changes are at the bottom. Feel free to have a read, I can’t wait to hear everyone’s feedback on this one.

Also, as a little incentive, the first 10 people to reblog this can have a character named after them Continue reading →

DAWN – Sample Scene

Posted on 18/01/2013 by Daniel Postlethwaite

I thought I would share with you guys what I have been working on. I have been working away filling out the Scene by Scene I did for my feature film DAWN. As my post the other day pointed out I am currently way way WAY under the pages I need to have.

The scene below is around the half hour mark currently but it is meant to come way later in the film, definitely after 45 minutes. The minimum for the script is 90 minutes so as you can see I am under. But as I mentioned in the linked post above this isn’t a bad thing at this moment in time because now I can add more to the film (which I thought seemed a little rushed to be honest), like character development and subplot etc.

Anyway, here is the scene and I hope you like it.
(Just a bit of background info, Alice (A programmer at DAWN labs) has just witnessed Roy (the main character) trash his apartment after Robert (the creator of DAWN) refused to turn off the machine and let Roy die as he wished.)

Continue reading →