I’m done. It’s over. Last assignment has been handed in. Fin.
The end of a long and eventful four year stint of University has finally happened. I submitted my last piece of University work on Monday 6th May. This assignment was my first ever feature film written from start to finish.
I’m not sure how “good” the script is, there is a lot that needs to be redone and I think that when I rewrite it whenever that is, I will be removing the virtual world stuff totally and just focusing on the characters and the theme of “lovers separated”. I will reuse the virtual world back drop for another project possibly, with a different plot because I do like this idea of a virtual world but I just believe it did not benefit the story I ultimately told in the end.
If anyone is interested in reading the full feature film script email me: email@example.com if you want to give feedback after reading it then be my guest, I will add it to a document and keep it with the script until I redraft it but at this stage feedback is no longer necessary. I will no longer be posting full scripts to here, I will instead do it the way I am with this, where if you’re interested in reading I will happily email it you but I think if I’m looking to get work made I should stop putting it online in its entirety.
Any short films though that I decide to write and make I will happily publish the full things here, for example a short film I want to make called “Impressions” I have already written about but any drafts of that I do in the comings months I will post because that work and the filming will be entirely my own…if that makes sense?
I’d just like to take a minute to thank you all as well. I know I have expressed my thanks numerous times over the recent months and the past years but without your constant help and feedback my writing and scripts wouldn’t be how they are today. WordPress has an amazing community with regards to helping each other out.
Here’s too whatever direction I decide to take now I have graduated! And again, thank you.
Hey guys, haven’t posted in a while because I’ve been cracking on with my script. I am now at 40 pages and for your eyes only I have decided to share the opening with you. You guys always give me great feedback and I do really appreciate it and I want you all to know that.
This section, the first 13 pages, is what I would say is the main opening in that it gets the exposition out of the way and establishes the main characters and the situation for the rest of the film to carry on with. Continue reading
It’s back! I’ve started working on DAWN again, the feature film I’ve been mulling over for the past year. If you’d like to get up to speed click here for more information.
Up to date? Okay let’s continue. Continue reading
Later than promised but as promised here are the first ten pages to my second draft of DAWN. Enjoy! Continue reading
Based on feedback from the first draft of DAWN it seems I have my work cut out for me, but I love a challenge and I have till May so I’m not in a situation yet and I will be working on it this coming week. I will post up the first 10 pages tomorrow of the new opening as I have to take them in to uni tomorrow so I may as well rewrite the beginning before I read it in class.
Here are the complete list of changes that you can see coming to the second draft: Continue reading
It’s done! The first draft of my feature film with the new working title Dawn: An Awakening.
It comes in at just over 57 pages. The minimum amount is 90 so I have 33 pages to work with whilst adding some back story and subplots which I have spoken about in previous posts. As I went along and finished up this first draft I kept a log of changes I want to make, just little things I won’t to go back and add etc to help with continuity and maybe add a bit more drama.
Both the script and the changes are at the bottom. Feel free to have a read, I can’t wait to hear everyone’s feedback on this one.
Also, as a little incentive, the first 10 people to reblog this can have a character named after them Continue reading
I thought I would share with you guys what I have been working on. I have been working away filling out the Scene by Scene I did for my feature film DAWN. As my post the other day pointed out I am currently way way WAY under the pages I need to have.
The scene below is around the half hour mark currently but it is meant to come way later in the film, definitely after 45 minutes. The minimum for the script is 90 minutes so as you can see I am under. But as I mentioned in the linked post above this isn’t a bad thing at this moment in time because now I can add more to the film (which I thought seemed a little rushed to be honest), like character development and subplot etc.
Anyway, here is the scene and I hope you like it.
(Just a bit of background info, Alice (A programmer at DAWN labs) has just witnessed Roy (the main character) trash his apartment after Robert (the creator of DAWN) refused to turn off the machine and let Roy die as he wished.)
I’ve ran into a bit of a problem with my Dawn script. The Scene by Scene I uploaded is 21 pages long. I’ve turned 10 of those pages into actual script making those 10 pages into 23 script pages. At this rate my film will end up around maybe 40-50 pages in length and the minimum is 90 pages.
I’m going to see this as a good thing though. I will finish writing the script and see what the final page count is and hopefully it will give me some room to develop the idea a little more, in particular I want to develop Lucy and Roy’s relationship and also some of the mystery about why the Shadowy Figure is haunting him so much.
I’ll let you know how it goes on!
Here is Draft 2 of the DAWN synopsis, made quite a few changes and added in a subplot, hoping people think this is much improved! Let me know what you think about the changes and click here to find all the other articles documenting my process in getting to this stage.
One thing I’m not sure of is the ending, having trouble thinking of how to end it so if you could suggest anything I would be very appreciative.
Story wise this will be how it has to remain till December 10th because my deadline is drawing closer. By then I need to have a finalised treatment, a beat outline, character biographies a full scene by scene breakdown and the first 10 pages of the script. So soon I will have to start writing the Scene by Scene breakdown hence why not much plot can changed at the moment.
After 10th of December though I can start reworking the plot (and the Scene by Scene accordingly) as starting next January after the Christmas break I have to actually write the full script with all the dialogue etc, so if I can get the plot and structure down before then in January it will be just a case of writing the script and then editing it constantly till the dialogue and action etc are as tight as I can make them!
Thanks again and please find the PDF of the synopsis below!
Dawn – Synopsis v2
As you may well be aware I am currently working on my first feature film called “DAWN”. This blog has pretty much been dedicated to it recently and I don’t see that changing until I break up from University at Christmas when I can have a break from thinking about it.
But it’s got to be said, I am really enjoying the experience. The feedback I am getting from people and you lot is fantastic! It’s all well and good showing it my friends but they’re always nice, “Oh that’s amazing” “Well done” which don’t get me wrong is nice to hear but at the same time it’s not constructive. And as a writer what you need is constructive feedback and that is what you, my readers, provide me and for that I am very thankful and I love each one of you.
The feedback I have got I have decided to collate by draft into a separate document which I will be able to hand in as extra evidence for my assignment and will hopefully net me more marks for this module I am currently doing. (This module is planning it with the final hand in being a full scene by scene breakdown of the script and the post-christmas module is the actual writing of the full script)
But something else that has come out of this that I have never done is a change-log. Continue reading