Last Night

“Last night I had the strangest sensation.
Falling slowly but in actuality,
I was stationary, in the same location.”

Hello there! Just a quick update to tell you about a weird feeling I had last night whilst led in bed, I started to write that first sentence and the next too came to me so thought I would just put it in quotes and it could be a nice little ice breaker for this here blog post.

But yeah, I had a weird sensation last whilst led in bed (not the falling sensation which that short ditty refers to). It was the feeling that someone had climbed on to my bed and settled next to me. Let me help you picture the scene. Continue reading

Who Are You?

Who are you, to so boldly look back out of the mirror at me? I don’t even recognise you anymore. I tell myself ‘that’s you Jon, that is you’ but it’s not. It looks like me but it isn’t. There’s something in those eyes that I have never seen before, and let me tell you this now, I’ve seen my eyes a lot. I mean, they’re my own fucking eyes. But it’s all changed now hasn’t it? Yes. Yes it has. Physically the eyes are not mine either. Dark bags hang below them, almost as if they became any larger they would become pendulous. The rest of the face fared no different. There was a gauntness to the cheeks that was barely hidden behind a thinning, grey, uneven beard. But that’s not the most alarming thing to have changed. Continue reading

Dear Amy – Draft 4

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Hey sorry again for the absence, been working away on my dissertation and doing a little more work on the Amy Draft which is due in on Tuesday so I have uploaded what is the fourth, and possibly final draft.

Not much has changed from Draft 3 bar some minor details and a small rewrite of the last segment of dialogue right at the end. Continue reading

Dear Amy – Draft 3

As mentioned earlier I received feedback today from my tutor and course mates about my monologue Dear Amy. Taking that on board, I redrafted the second draft into the new and improved shiny THIRD DRAFT. All that’s really changed is changing it from a letter to a video log but I think I managed it pretty well.

The next step based on any new feedback on this post will be to rejig the structure and how some of the tale is told but I just wanted to convert it mainly at the moment from the old “format” to the new one. I have linked the PDF below, I hope you guys enjoy. Continue reading

Dear Amy – Update

So there hasn’t be an update on either my monologue or film script recently hence the “Open Questions” that seem to have been a little hit and miss but the response to the previous ones have been good just no comments on the latest one yet really. Don’t know what went wrong there.

But onto the topic at hand. Dear Amy. My monologue.

I managed to get some more feedback on it today after “performing” it in class (read performing as – reading out nervously). The feedback was as follows: Continue reading

Picture It & Write

This is the picture for this weeks Picture It & Write. Picture It & Write is a feature over at Ermilia.

I used to take part in this every time they were posted but eventually I grew too lazy to keep up with it and stopped but after finding some inner well of motivation recently I decided to why not give this weeks a go? And you should too, visit their blog and take part and subscribe! My contribution is below.

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Picture It & Write

This is the picture for this weeks Picture It & Write. Picture It & Write is a feature over at Ermilia.

I used to take part in this every time they were posted but eventually I grew too lazy to keep up with it and stopped but after finding some inner well of motivation recently I decided to why not give this weeks a go? And you should too, visit their blog and take part and subscribe! My contribution is below. Continue reading

Dear Amy, – Five Minute Monologue – Draft 2!

IMG_20130122_195553I have just completed draft 2 of my five minute monologue “Dear Amy,”

Not much has changed to be honest, because it was so short and the feedback was so positive from the first draft I couldn’t seen much reason too change it. There didn’t seem to be many spelling or grammar mistakes that stood out, though I could be wrong, either so it went quite well.

I have just changed some of the phrasing in it and added a few more lines so if you want to read the second draft feel free or if you didn’t read the first now is your chance to read the slightly new and improved version!

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Dear Amy, (Draft 1)

IMG_20130122_195553Dear Amy, (stylised with the comma) is a 5 minute monologue I have been tasked to write for my screenwriting module this semester (along with my script report). I got the brief this morning and have just finished what is the very first rough draft.

I hope you all like it and the little mini-twist at the end. Please feel free to leave any feedback you have for me in the comments! Continue reading

3 Minute Film Idea

JpegI figure it was time to let you guys know my idea, see if I can get a little feedback before tomorrow! After around 12:00GMT I won’t be able to make major changes but for now I figured I would share my idea with you guys to see if there is any improvements I can make before pitching tomorrow.

To the write is a picture of the pillars that are mentioned below. I am including both the premise and the synopsis.

The working title at the moment is “Divide” because of the divide that separates them etc. If you can think of a better one though let me know!

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